sealchan
Well-Known Member
Here is my latest draft...I have removed what I think is unnecessary to the story (too much telling). I have also decided that I can give the Goddess equal time if I give her an equal role but that does not mean I have to give her first person perspective equal coverage. This will mean a lot less work for me and I can stay much closer to the original text. The terseness of the author(s) of Genesis is a very good thing. It creates a sense of confidence in the narrative and helps to leave open ambiguities and questions for the audience to bring to the text. There are some name changes and fluctuations as well...
Before the Beginning
Before the beginning there was the Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential. It was "nothing yet" because nothing-yet had been created. It was potential because it could become something. And It was infinite because there was nothing yet to stop it.
The first thing that the Nothing-Yet felt like doing was to prove to itself that it was there. It thought, "If I create something, then I will know that I am what I think I am."
So the Nothing-Yet created something; it does not matter what it was. It was happy at first. But after contemplating its creation it thought, "What if this is a hallucination?" There was nothing other than the Nothing-Yet and its creation that could tell the Nothing-Yet whether its creation was real or not. For a long, long time the Nothing-Yet thought about how it could prove to itself that it existed.
One day the Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential had given up trying to solve its dilemma and decided to play around with creating some more things. First, It created a basketball. Then It created a mouse. The mouse sniffed the basketball. The basketball did nothing. The Nothing-Yet continued to create until it discovered that some of the things it created would destroy what it had already created, but some would exist along with what was created. It decided It would try and see how many different things It could create that would coexist. The Universe began to take shape.
The Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential then realized, "I am. I do exist. What I am and what I am creating is not an illusion because some things can coexist and some cannot. And since I am all there is, I can decide what is real and what is not. I will be what I will be."
Then there was a loud crack as of some unbreakable substance fracturing into pieces.
Then I AM heard a voice that came not from anything that He had created. "I AM, I am here."
I WILL BE spoke and said, "Who are you?"
“Who are we?” ARE We replied.
And I AM thought, “That is a hallucination. She does not exist.” And there was silence.
Then, in the silence, I WILL BE took his first breath and the He said, “I AM.” And the heavens and the earth were formed from the pieces of the Nothing-Yet. I AM looked and saw and there was silence. “Good.”
Before the Beginning
Before the beginning there was the Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential. It was "nothing yet" because nothing-yet had been created. It was potential because it could become something. And It was infinite because there was nothing yet to stop it.
The first thing that the Nothing-Yet felt like doing was to prove to itself that it was there. It thought, "If I create something, then I will know that I am what I think I am."
So the Nothing-Yet created something; it does not matter what it was. It was happy at first. But after contemplating its creation it thought, "What if this is a hallucination?" There was nothing other than the Nothing-Yet and its creation that could tell the Nothing-Yet whether its creation was real or not. For a long, long time the Nothing-Yet thought about how it could prove to itself that it existed.
One day the Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential had given up trying to solve its dilemma and decided to play around with creating some more things. First, It created a basketball. Then It created a mouse. The mouse sniffed the basketball. The basketball did nothing. The Nothing-Yet continued to create until it discovered that some of the things it created would destroy what it had already created, but some would exist along with what was created. It decided It would try and see how many different things It could create that would coexist. The Universe began to take shape.
The Nothing-Yet of Infinite Potential then realized, "I am. I do exist. What I am and what I am creating is not an illusion because some things can coexist and some cannot. And since I am all there is, I can decide what is real and what is not. I will be what I will be."
Then there was a loud crack as of some unbreakable substance fracturing into pieces.
Then I AM heard a voice that came not from anything that He had created. "I AM, I am here."
I WILL BE spoke and said, "Who are you?"
“Who are we?” ARE We replied.
And I AM thought, “That is a hallucination. She does not exist.” And there was silence.
Then, in the silence, I WILL BE took his first breath and the He said, “I AM.” And the heavens and the earth were formed from the pieces of the Nothing-Yet. I AM looked and saw and there was silence. “Good.”